Can somebody revise or correct my sentences? and can you add a funny thing?
Drinking Soda
Soda is one of the most popular soft drinks here in the Unite States. Maybe it is the caffeine that makes soda taste so good, or maybe it is the sugar. Soda is now a household item, just like milk. There is a study showed that the United State is the most country that it’s people drinking soda. The average American drinks about 65 gallons of soda a year. The largest customers for soda are teenagers and children. According to the Centre for Science, teenagers in the United States now drinking soda twice as much as milk. Fifty-six percent of 8-year-olds down soft drinks daily. We have all to think about the harmful effects of this drink in our bodies. Soda causes many health problems that everyone can suffer from like fattiness, tooth decay, and caffeine dependence.
Recently a study showed a strong link between drinking soda and childhood obesity, that is because of the big amount of sugar that a can of soda has which is about ten teaspoons of sugar. It is made sure that sugar can be cause to high blood pressure, high cholesterol and heart diseases. Soda includes a high amount of calories too, almost 150 calories per 12 once can. In my opinion the main cause for why children like to drink soda is that soda is available in school.
Second, tooth decay. Newly a study showed nearly 3200 Americans 9 to 29 years old who drink soda have tooth decay. Not just because of the high level of sugar in soda, but because of all element in soft drinks that cause tooth problems. The acids in soda pop are also notorious for etching tooth enamel in ways that can cause to cavities.
Third, I will talk about caffeine dependence. Soda like coffee includes large amounts of caffeine. Even sofa drink industry agrees that caffeine causes the same effects in children as adults, therefore, people who drink soda because addicted on it because their need for the caffeine. Soda contains an average of 35 to 38 milligrams per 12 ounce can. Even diet sodas which are usually chosen by those who are trying to control calories and sugar often pack a lot more caffeine than regular soda.
If you are still drinking soda this is something that is quite simple to stop. In my mind there is absolutely no justification and reason to drink soda. Both sugar and NutraSweet are deadly to your health and will gradually rob you of it. So stick to pure water.
There is a study showed that the United State is the most country that it’s people drinking soda — I would replace with: ACCORDING TO A STUDY, THE U.S. IS THE WORLD’S TOP SODA CONSUMMING COUNTRY.
The largest customers for soda are teenagers and children — THE MAIN SODA CONSUMERS ARE TEENAGERS AND CHILDREN.
…teenagers in the United States now drinking soda twice as much as milk — TEENAGERS IN THE U.S. DRINK TWICE AS MUCH SODA THAN THEY DO MILK NOWADAYS.
Fifty-six percent of 8-year-olds down soft drinks daily — DOWN? YOU DIDN’T MEAN "DRINK"?
We have all to think about the harmful effects of this drink in our bodies — WE ALL HAVE TO THINK ABOUT THE HARMFUL EFFECT THIS BEVERAGE HAS IN OUR BODIES.
Soda causes many health problems that everyone can suffer from like fattiness, tooth decay, and caffeine dependence — SODA CAUSES MANY HEALTH PROBLEMS THAT ANYONE CAN SUFFER FROM, SUCH AS OBESITY, TOOTH DECAY AND ADDICTION TO CAFFEINE.
It is made sure that sugar can be cause to high blood pressure, high cholesterol and heart diseases — SUGAR CAN CERTAINLY TRIGGER PROBLEMS SUCH AS HIGH BLOOD PRESSURE ……
Soda includes a high amount of calories too — SODA CONTAINS A HIGH AMOUNT……
In my opinion the main cause for why children like to drink soda is that soda is available in school — IN MY OPINION, THE MAIN REASON FOR CHILDREN TO DRINK SODA IS THAT IT IS EASILY AVAILABLE AT SCHOOL (and everywhere, for that matter!).
Newly a study showed nearly 3200 Americans 9 to 29 years old who drink soda have tooth decay — A RECENT STUDY SHOWED THAT NEARLY 3200 AMERICANS BETWEEN THE AGE OF 9 AND 29 WHO USE TO DRINK SODA HAVE TOOTH DECAY.
The acids in soda pop are also notorious for etching tooth enamel in ways that can cause to cavities — THE ACIDS IN SODA POP ARE ALSO KNOWN TO ERODE TOOTH ENAMEL, WHICH CAN EVENTUALLY LEAD TO CAVITY BREAK OUTS.
Even sofa drink industry agrees that caffeine causes the same effects in children as adults, therefore, people who drink soda because addicted on it because their need for the caffeine — EVEN THE SODA INDUSTRY AGREES THAT CAFFEINE HAS THE SAME EFFECTS BOTH IN CHILDREN AND ADULTS, THEREFORE, PEOPLE GET ADDICTED TO SODA BECAUSE OF THEIR NEED TO CONSUME CAFFEINE.
Both sugar and NutraSweet are deadly to your health and will gradually rob you of it — BOTH SUGAR…….. TO YOUR HEALTH AND WILL GRADUALLY AFFECT IT.
"Funny" thing you can add: Why would you like to drink a substance that can even be used to remove rust from a metal surface!!??? *note: this is what I read that can be done with Coke.
I hope that helps, I’m not an expert either but I do tend to do good on style correcting
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